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Adam Cross

Former Airman, country boy, all around crazy guy, but mostly writer. My work runs the gambit from 500 word microfiction to 30K novellas. Current plans include an anthology (Ordinary Adventures) which will include a three part novella (Ordinary Jim). Next year: a serialized novel as well as a straight-up novel (currently in the works). Other projects include a series of short animations, a tabletop game system, and a comic book. Genres: Urban Fantasy, Epic Fantasy, Dark Fiction, Horror Follow me on G+! gplus.to/daemonmessiah

Story: Beautiful

Reviews

Lisa Rose

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Your story is interesting. What price beauty? Well, Jim certainly gets what he wanted, just not the way he wanted it. I did notice a few things in your text. There were quite a few words that didn't seem to belong, like they were extra. Proof reading is hard sometimes, it is easy to read what you meant to write instead of what is actually there. Putting away a story for a week or so and then pulling it out to re-read seems to help me. The mistakes jump out at you. Also there were times when you repeated words. You wrote: The nose was average and well placed on a tanned smooth face with high cheekbones, under deep eyes of deep blue. You don't need the first 'deep'. I hope this helps. Again a good story. If you have the time please read story 'Drift Away' and leave a review to let me know if you liked it.

Doward Stevens

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Well done. Ah yes, there is always a price for vanity. I liked that he was still invisible after his transformation. Very professionally written. I am impressed. Please take time to read and review my story D.R.T. I would welcome your opinion.

Brenda Schouten-Beckett

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Well done. Interesting concept and it made me actually want to hear more about the character. Excellent "teaser" for a novella maybe?

CaldwellYSR

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That was awesome. I was almost ready to give up on it when the guy was eating and watching tv because I'm feeling a bit impatient right now but then 2 seconds later you had me hook line and sinker. Good job.

ilyanna

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only have had the time to read the very beginning, but I love your wordsmithing and am REALLY looking forward to reading more

dara

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loved the story Adam....and i liked that it left you wanting more :)

GrimsonGrey

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I felt pulled into the story. Mr. Cross makes the extra effort to show you the world his characters live in. With that said, I would kindly request that Mr. Cross provide a second more in-depth version for those of us who have quickly become fans. Well done sir.

S0rceress0

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Needs just a touch of development in "dreamtime", but an excellent transition at the end. The price was not evident until the end. Good job!

Anthony

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Excellent twist! Now he's perfect but no one knows

Amy Donovan

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Excellent, light read. Cannot wait to see what happens next. I am hooked!

Lason Strike

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"Beautiful" is an imaginative story with an ingeniously twisted climax. Jim, the main character, is well defined: an average guy shuffling along the path of life actively dissatisfied with his lot. He is a person everyone can relate to. There is always a cost for our choices in life but what it will ultimately be, we can seldom know. Jim's struggle with his choice and it's aftermath, arrived at via an exciting trip to a ghostly world of surprising scenery and symbolism, starkly mirrors every man's walk through life. "Beautiful" gives us a glimpse into a complex world rife with possibilities. I look forward to the next voyage.

Bliss

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The shift from mundanely ignorable to perfect and magically forgettable is fascinating. I want more!

AndyB

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Very well done! Nicely paced and with an interesting premise.

mike

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The buildup is ok but finishing felt a bit rushed. It is also not convincing that some one whose whole life has been a nobody should suddenly turn everything upside down without exploring first.

Book lover

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Nope, I tried really hard to pretend like I liked this story and the ending. I wanted to because it got such great reviews and I was hopeful that it would be a great story....but the ending doesn't really explain anything and leaves it up to the imagination. So what? The guy goes invisable between his work and the bar? Is that what that was supposed to be? My confusion is understandable....really. Read the story.

Radical Librarian

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Macabre and twisted. My favorite...

Kathy Larson

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Perfect spooky stuff for the time of year.

T Frederick Kelly

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Fast and dark. Perfect for this time of the year.

miridunn

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Great story, Adam. You developed the character nicely and moved the story along quickly. I loved the repetition of his name. Very effective. Another winner!

Isaac Magnin

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An excellent short to read while plotting my conspiracy's next gambit. Please continue; I daresay that my opposition will keep my quite busy.

Azure

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Excellent storyline

Corey Fisk

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An excellent introduction to a rich and textured story-verse. Stands alone, but teases the reader's curiosity. More, please.

tingles

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Awesome story

Sarah

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Good work! Read it!

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