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Just a girl who likes to write. The mountains are my religion. Slanging words. Tall, blonde and tatted up. Bacon is the best.

Story: Devil's Advocate

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Busyfingers

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The dialogue was great, and the details of the advertising world seemed on point...well, as far as I know, and I don't know much, admittedly. I like the subtle humour woven in. However, the paragraphs were a bit too crowded like someone mentioned, and in that scene with Sam, did you notice that she was mentioned by name before we were supposed to even know her name was Sam?

Lisa Rose

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Your drew me into your story. I was in the room watching with sadistic glee. I only have one critique. You should start a new paragraph when you change speakers in writing dialogue. If you have the time, please read my story, 'Drift Away' and leave a review to let me know if you liked it.

M.J. Milner

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Enjoyed the story. Clean grasp of writing what you know and a fine sense of dialog.Better for the client to love the agency not the ad applies here- keep writing. Thanks for the effort. and, for the record- I have no idea who you are.

RosieP

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Great! You really know how to draw a reader into the room and make them stay put. Beautifully written and kept me wanting more. You certainly have a way with words.

NurseLady

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Lovely. Made me feel like I was in that room. Keep it up woman!

cdmd

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thank you for sharing this sneak peek of the advertising world. Possibility of a cinematic future for this book, totally :)

Christine Noel

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Good pacing, engaging storyline, and very entertaining. Keep up the good work, girl.. You have so much talent. Keep writing! Can't wait to see what you come up with next:)

lms

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Nice job. Very well written, I didn't want it to end. America will be lucky to include this author's work in its literary collection.

L

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Well written. Were able to keep it focused while pulling the reader right into the room, as if they were the lead character themselves. Can't wait to see more from you in the future...and a bright one it will be. Keep putting the ink to the pad. ;)

Douglas Morrison

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Narrow window stories like this one are hard to pull off, and I think you did it. This story has a strong narrative voice, and a close narrative distance. I'd bet maintaining the distance within the narrative was hard at two points in this story. Fine work!

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