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Christine DeFalco currently lives in South Jersey with her husband and puppy. When she is not spending time with family and friends, she is busy reading, crocheting, and enjoying the outdoors. Christine's heart thrives for her writing, and she snatches as much time as she can to work on her stories, hoping to one day be an established author.

Story: Drawer 1282

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Doward Stevens

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Quite engrossing. I was put in mind of Lovecraft's Herbert West. I enjoyed the mid-story shift; predictability is never a writer' friend. I liked that secret agendas always undo the hero. You possess truly impressive skills. Commendable effort.

Dr.SteveBrule

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Very interesting story. I understood the sentence fragments were intentional and thought it added to the suspense of the story. Look forward for more from this author.

Solstice1950

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The tItle drew me right in. The story kept me turning pages and reminded me of the short stories on "the Twilight Zone". I like the fragmented sentence style. It helped to build suspense and emotion. Short story writing can be demanding so that there is a good balance of narrative and dialog with a clear and entertaining story and I think this writer did just that!

Lisa Rose

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The punctuation wasn't great and there were lots of sentence fragments. But.. very, very good story. The first sentence is confusing, however. Could you have meant odorless, clear liquid? Please read my story Drift Away and write a review to let me know if you liked it. You will see I am a fan of fragmented sentences myself, but mostly in dialogue between characters. I look forward to hearing from you.

emily f.

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An amazing story, full of twists and turns! Keeps you wanting more with every word you read. The story is packed with emotion and stunning description! Has the errie greatness of Pet Cemetary and a modern day Frankenstein. Truly a spectacular read!

Gunny

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It was a good read. From the first sentence I was hooked. I was surprised with the ending. Not the usual Happily everafter ending. I look forward to the sequel.

Another Reader

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Awesome

Alyson

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Aside from the multiple sentence fragments and sometimes confusing lack of proper punctuation, I thought this story had a lot of potential. I started overlooking the fragments, chalking them up to a style choice and found the story had pretty decent pacing. It managed to keep my interest. . . to a point. There was suddenly, what seemed to me, an unnecessary genre shift mid-story. It felt a bit disjointed from that point and possibly could have benefited from having the characters' actions less detailed. I understand there is a purpose to what those actions were building toward, yet the manner of their detailing managed to pull me out of the story in which I had started getting comfortable. Overall, I think the story (and writer) is still full of a lot of potential. The main characters are well developed, with interesting backstories. I feel with a little more tweaking, more imagery as opposed to specific detailing of actions, this story could be pretty damned good. Thanks, Christine, keep writing! Also, it was bugging me, was "colorless colored liquid" a typo?

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