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Aspiring game writer spending her spare time writing asinine flash fictions, the occasional game reviews and the even rarer short stories.

Story: Kyrie Eleison

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Q:
When you start a new story do you prepare an outline in advance or do you just jump right in?
A:
Unless the story is meant to be a novel, I tend not to prepare in advance. I write whenever inspiration strikes.
Q:
How do you deal with writing criticism, apart from just ignoring it?
A:
Criticism is always hard to hear of course, my strategy is to hear it first, ignore it for the time being, and later, I'll come back to it and listen to it again with a fresher perspective.
Q:
America's Next Author has been running for almost 8 weeks. If you could re-submit now, would you change anything about your story?
A:
I'll flesh it out further.

Reviews

Lisa Rose

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This is a very good story. You do a good job of building the suspense. As we watch her, watching Dante, it is hard to imagine that no one else saw what she saw. It adds to the build up when Dante begins haunting her dreams. The best part is the ending. 'I have to go now. Someone is knocking at my door. God have mercy.' Really enjoyable read. If you have the time please read my story 'Drift Away' and leave a review to let me know if you liked it.

Sarbjit

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Very well written for a budding writer. Keep it up :-)

Smith and Jones

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It has a lot of potential to transform into something I love, but more character development and suspense building could bring it a long way. Keep at it!

Frances Bell

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Enjoyable read. Well paced, although further development would make this story reach it's potential.

Alyce Wilson

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Yet another piece that deserves to be higher in the rankings! You do a good job of increasing the tension and suspense in this piece, especially through the dream imagery. It is a little unbelievable that all the other therapists would be fooled so easily, so more evidence about his ability to manipulate is probably needed. In addition, it was a logical stumbling block that a group of psychological interns could be the deciders regarding the release of potentially dangerous inmates. Those aside, it is a well-told tale, perfect for the weeks before Halloween.

drrh

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really nice tg!a simple interpretation of some complexed characters.would love for it to be a long read.

doreen

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wonderful piece!

trinatee

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Great read! i love your writing!!

Jace

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While I do like the story overall (same as I have first read it), it is a rather good read, there are a few things I thought I'd point out now I have the opportunity to re-read it. The style is simple, yet intriguing, weaving a rather pretty scene of horrific proportions. However, I felt that the pace could have been stretched slightly further. It seemed a bit too rushed, and it could have been more suspenseful, more intense. It is haunting but it could have been much more. Nevertheless, it is a good work, and really, I'm not one to speak considering the sheer laziness I have when it comes to actual writing. All in all, great job. And sorry this took so long.

Cacarx

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Well written! I like the suspense which keeps me wanting to read more! I too wished the ending could be more precise. Keep it up TG! :)

PeterKhiew

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Usage of appropriate words for each situation. Presentation of content is stylistic with good diction. Writer described the flow of the story well. I recommend this article highly.

mike

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I love the way suspense is build up in the story. Slowly the creepiness of Dante is revealed. There is a hint of the supernatural which mesh well. The tense ending leave me wanting more. This can be develop into a novella. I look forward to that.

YP

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love the script...great job!

Alpha

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Interesting read. Like a previous reader, it left me wondering if it's the patient or the psychiatrist that was truly the crazy. Great work!

Dalim

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Great piece!

jopas

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Nice work. It left me intrigued and wanting to read more. Perhaps if it was longer the author could have given the reader more details about Dante's background and character.

Book lover

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Good Job! The story left you hanging...I don't know about anyone else but i was wondering in the end who the crazy one was...the patient or the psychiatrist. I wish the ending had been more definitive though. No offense to this particular author, but I am getting tired of reading these short stories with no set ending...the open ended stories are heavily concentrated in this contest.

UNCLE MANGO

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YOU HAVE BUILT AN EXCELLENT TRACK ! ANYTHING IS POSSIBLE!!!

Olya

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NICE!!!!

Elyn

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Awesome read! The suspense was good, it got me hooked till the end. It's an interesting plot, would be even more exciting if there's a sequel! :)

cryingwolf

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Great job

Naught

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Superb story, great read.

agnes

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Wow, excellent piece TG... a psychological thriller! You have shown in your narratives an intricate & intimate appreciation of the battling of wits without and emotional equilibrium within. Also enjoyed the detailed observations of the scenarios.. Great writing style & arrangement... simply love it!

fookc

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Intricate evaluation of the real human behaviour, just as the story line is doing. What do we see - the ring, the hole, or the doughnut? Herd mentality? Is the truth on documents or is the truth is out there? Captivating suspense, potential to be a full length novel. Reminds me of the 1975 multiple award winning drama film One Flew Over The Cuckoo's Nest directed by Milos Forman. Great work!

Sue

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short but riveting...good job TG!

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