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I'd put more here, but the character limit is 100. Not enough room for me. :/

Story: The Journal of Sectum Reid

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Alyce Wilson

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I love vampire stories and like that you had a lot of traditional elements in here, including naming some of the Order after substances said to be deadly to vampires. There are some passages that don't flow as well, and a good way to correct for that would be to read them out loud. I also thought that this story reads like part of a longer piece instead of a standalone story. It needs a stronger crisis/conflict and a resolution. Nice start! Please take a look at my story, "Dating Safari," and leave your comments.

Rose Burke

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Always love a good vampire story! I think this is a great start. This character really shines in his journal entries. Keep working on it! If you get a chance check out my story This Girl and a Bartender, thanks!

Lisa Rose

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Hi, Henry. enjoyed reading your story. But noticed a few things. You tend to use sentence fragments and a couple of subject/verbs did not agree. Try reading your stories out loud or into a tape recorder, this should help. I, myself have trouble with commas. Check out these two sentences for example: Let's eat Grandma. or Let's eat, Grandma. The puncuation makes all the difference. Still a good effort.

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