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HM Gruendler-Schierloh

HM Gruendler-Schierloh is a bilingual writer, language instructor, and translator. To support her deep interest in verbal and written communications with academic credentials, the author acquired a BA in journalism and advanced credits in linguistics. Some of HM Gruendler-Schierloh's work has been published in the United States, the United Kingdom, Canada, and online.

Story: Ben's Harem

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Q:
What is the best writing advice you've ever heard?
A:
SHOW, DON'T TELL!
Q:
When you start a new story do you prepare an outline in advance or do you just jump right in?
A:
I jump right in, write the story, then revise, revise, revise, revise...
Q:
How do you deal with writing criticism, apart from just ignoring it?
A:
When giving criticism, I am kind, but to the point! I also take it well, in fact, I welcome it! I strongly believe that feedback from the reading audience, positive or negative, is essential for writers to learn and to grow in their craft.
Q:
America's Next Author has been running for almost 8 weeks. If you could re-submit now, would you change anything about your story?
A:
I would not change my story, but I wish I had been able to participate much sooner - if only to figure out how it all works. As a traditional writer, I still have a lot to learn about online publications.

Reviews

Tegon Maus

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A good story HM. A good ending... fun all the way around !!

smiles

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Great story...loved the twist at the end!

John V.E.

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A wonderful read from start to finish. Highly recommended!

Bookmeister

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The most fascinating literary experience of my life!!! A stunning masterpiece. I was spinning, I was jumping, I was dancing with my cats. It´s like Hitchcock meets Harrison Ford as Hans Solo. My mind was freaking-out totally. Still haven´t even totally recovered. Etherial… Peace, Bookmeister

Kiko

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Excellent crime story with a very clever plot. It was delightful to read. I am looking forward to reading more stories by this author.

Peter Lahanas

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Well written crime story. Fast paced with a nice build up. I can see why you didn't mention Anne's name in the beginning and I agree with the decision. I particularly enjoyed the Sheriff's attention to detail and was impressed with your ability to stage the crime scene with all the seemingly random variables (such as the storm and the Rolex) which ended up being critical to the story in the end. My favorite part however, was what he noticed when he hugged her. I agree with the slight need for editing but all of the stories I've read so far need editing (mine too) and this is to be expected in a competition for aspiring writers. That's why there are editors. I really enjoyed this story and would love to see more from you. I'm definitely a fan. Well done. Five stars.

okapi

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I enjoyed this story very much- I usually avoid mysteries b/c I can't put them downto do things I;m supposed to be doing- and I couldn't stop reading this one either - very entertaining- I think it could easily be made into a TV crime story script!

bluemalibu

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I haven't read a crime story for years - good job with the twist. I am sure that with more word count, you would have done an amazing job with this story. I noticed the phase (instead of face), but that was about it. Storyline was great, and I liked the detective.

Skyy

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This is a good story with plenty of detail to keep you interested throughout. I would like to read more by this author.

Chilipeppers

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A very well done, compact mystery that is carried along at a fast pace with well written dialogue. I am not a mystery reader as such but I really enjoyed this one. Did a nice job of foreshadowing and brought it all together at the end without any fluff. Nice writing.

Margaret Alice

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I thought this story had an interesting plot. I liked how the mystery progessed, although I agree with Lisa Rose on how it might be hard to remember the connection from the beginning to the end. Other than that it was a very intriguing story. Could you please check out my story, "The Fate Continuum?" Good luck!

Undertow

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Well written, engaging crime tale.

Nurdieh

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Wonderful to read. Was a pleasure from start to end.

chsbava

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The story is captivating and very well written. I really enjoyed reading it!

Busyfingers

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I enjoyed reading this! The story carried me along and was fast-paced all the way. It was a nice ending to the mystery. There were a few errors, though. Spelling: monkeys, not monkies; phase, not face. Also, this sentence: However, since Ben had been killed upstairs and his wife had been the one discovering the homicide, Milford was wondering whether the guests had so busy with having fun, etc. The tenses should agree throughout; so it should be 'his wife had been the one who discovered the homicide, Milford wondered...' and so on. Great writing, keep it up! thanks for reviewing my story, Double Take.

evemo

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good story, enjoyable reading

Heidi Koestner

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I like the story. I liked the plot. I think it is very well written and I enjoyed reading it. So I think it deserves 5 stars.

Lisa Rose

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Welcome to the contest. I really liked your story. Good opening paragraph, it grabbed my attention and held it. I'm trying not to give too much away here in the review so bear with me. I liked the way that you used foreshadowing. There is only one problem. We are not told the name of the victim of the first crime and so when she is mentioned later it might be hard for others to connect the two things. The other touches were perfect and gave good clues to the detective and the reader. I thought I knew what had happened after hearing about the meeting between Ben and the woman outside of his office and I was right. It didn't take a big leap to put all of the puzzle pieces together and it was a satisfactory ending if not a happy one. Sometimes people do get what they deserve.

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