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Julia Fiedler

Writing is never out of style and always finds a place, even in the digital age. Obsessed with reading since "The Cat in The Hat", I was absorbing novels such as "Black Beauty" and "Anne of Green Gables" as early as 1st Grade. I was inspired by the effect words could have on me and aspired to become a journalist. I was fully dedicated to that goal through high school (becoming co-editor of a teen magazine in Tulsa, Oklahoma) and a good portion of college (yearbook staff and writing for the university paper). However, I lost sight of that goal as I allowed financial obligations to take priority. I now have a great career in the digital world (eCommerce and Interactive Marketing), but have recently been bitten by the writing "bug" again. With this submission, I am making amends to my writing voice for silencing it for so long. There is no feeling more exhilarating than that of creation (I think it's when we feel closest to God), whether it be becoming a parent, starting a company or creating a piece of art that fully satisfies self expression. Therefore, my ultimate goal is to help inspire creations in the lives of those who read my story.

Story: Sleepwalker

Reviews

Lisa Rose

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Okay, don't take this the wrong way. But your story needs a lot of work. It just kind of lays there and never goes anywhere. I'm always saying, 'show don't tell'. Being a student of writing you probably know that means to have your characters talk about it and show it to us, instead of you telling us about it. Your story could be really good, you just have to work on the structure of it some more. Don't let any of the reviews discourage you. Keep writing. Practice, practice, practice. I have gotten some bad reviews too ( feel free to read them, some are... interesting). I bet if you had started out with the woman talking to her fellow employees at the diner (or having them talk about her) and had her think on her walk home about her pitiful life and then... had the landlady yelling at her to watch how long she let the ceiling fan run... We would have learned a lot about her and the change at the end would have meant more. Does that makes sense to you? That's only my opinion though. Keep writing! If you have the time please read my story 'Drift Away' and leave a review to let me know if you liked it.

Frances Bell

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Hmmm... shame. This story had a lot of potential but like the misty being, dissolved into nothing and petered out. I think the writer needs to clarify exactly what she is trying to say or at the very least know what her character is trying to say (and yes, there is a difference). As Ramon says, too much exposition in the beginning and the spirit story seems to be more interesting but it goes no-where. This needs a re-think but has the kernels of a good story, you just need to focus down on them. Well done anyway. If you have time, or the inclination, please honestly review my piece 'Solophyst'.

PW

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Great story. Julia is a very talented writer and hope to see more from her.

Ramon

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You show talent, Julia. This story is interesting, but misses the mark on a number of levels. In a short story, you need to get to the point and captivate your reader early on. The first 3/4 of your story is all exposition. I felt there were two strong scenes here; the older, worn-out, woman working at the restaurant among younger peers who feel sorry for her, and the visit by the spirit in her basement apartment. I think you should have concentrated on one or the other. Together they convoluted the entire story. This also could have used another thorough edit. There were a number of misused and misspelled words. On the positive side, you do have a knack for storytelling, and a keen eye for detail. I would keep practicing.

Loll

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Great descriptive narrative! Not only could I see her room, but I could feel it.

Janice

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Loved your story! Please write more!

KW in KC

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Excellent. Introduction, character development, conflict, resolution. All in a very short story that didn't feel rushed.

Pedroia

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I laughed, I cried, it was better than cats!

TTownvstrom

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It really piqued my interest, I wanted more!

Pasty

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Very interesting. I would like to see what happens next.

bithead101

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Suspenseful with a touch of supernatural thriller. Wonderfully descriptive exposition without being fanciful, vividly painting the picture of a troubled woman trapped by fear(brought on by regret of some kind, perhaps?) who is forced to begin dealing with her state of being. I hope you'll expand on this and let us read the rest! :)

Dancer

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Interesting way to begin the story, I wanted to know more about why the character had landed where she did. It seemed that the apathy must have come from someplace deeper than was expressed. But maybe that is the truly scary part of the story. Maybe it did not.

Amo

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This is a widely relatable, seemingly predictable character that instantly makes the reader feel an uncomfortable familiarity with the story, and yet this author takes us to an unpredictable place with the twist in the story. It's written with deep imagery, and a fair sense of mystery without losing the the reader. I can't wait to read what happens next!

Always Right

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I really enjoyed this story. It keeps you intrigued due to all the detail. Very well written and thought out...

Fortworthfletch

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Wild mind. Its good she's 6-4. When she's 80 she will still around 5-9

MS

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I enjoyed reading this story. Thanks, Julia, for telling me about it.

Shirley

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I enjoyed the story very much. The story flows evenly with good grammar making it easy to read and enjoy. I did enjoy it very much. We can all fall into that trap if we are not careful.

12345

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Great story!!

vietvet

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We need more happy ending like this one.

Sunbeam

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Great read! Suspenseful and makes you want to read more.

LB

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This story left me wanting more. I feel the need to know how the characters life was changed, if it was changed at all. Was it all a dream? Great story..

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