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Kemp Sabourin

Hey my name is Kemp. I am a struggling writer from a small hole in the wall town in Pennsylvania. I love to completely surround people in my words when I write. I am very descriptive and like to paint the scene for even the smallest detail. I really think I have what it takes to grab the attention of anyone that reads what I write, and if you doubt me then why are you still reading this.

Story: Pursuit of Progress

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Q:
What is the best writing advice you've ever heard?
A:
Be yourself, and tell the story how you feel it. Many people get bullied into turning their stories into a mainstream media's little baby and I feel that sucks all of the creativity and individualism right out of us.
Q:
When you start a new story do you prepare an outline in advance or do you just jump right in?
A:
It probably is better to plan honestly but I like to let the characters be themselves and not be inflicted by my own ridicule and if I write out and contemplate on who I think they should be...well I will end up changing them and I don't want that.

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Grammer needs to be worked on a bit.

Penniless Writer

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"I really think I have what it takes to grab the attention of anyone that reads what I write, and if you doubt me then why are you still reading this." When someone makes a statement like this, one of two things is true. He is either extraordinarily talented, or he is arrogant. Based on this entry, I think it is the latter. First, this is short story contest, and you did not submit a short story. It is clearly an excerpt, and we are given no context for it until the very end, and even the context we are given doesn't explain why any of the events occurred. Second, you can't start a story with "11 Years Later." Eleven years later than what? It if it eleven years from now, give the year. My suspicion, however, is that it was eleven years after whatever happened in the previous chapter, which is further evidence of this being an excerpt rather than a story. The character of Scythe is sexist and one-dimensional, the plot is minimal and thinly written, and the dialogue is best suited to a graphic novel. You focused more on figurative language than on character or arc. The really arrogant thing, however, is the total lack of attention to editing. There are so many spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors that some sentences are unreadable. All of that said, I think you really do have potential to be a very good writer, but you need less ego and a lot more attention to detail. You can turn a phrase, but don't get so wrapped up in being clever that you miss the forest for the trees.

HM Gruendler-Schierloh

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You certainly have a way of catching a reader's attention. I got totally absorbed in your chapter - and I would really like to see where this story is going. However, proofread a little more, particularly in regard to spelling, typos, etc. Those tiny errors do not diminish the quality of your writing, but they do get in the way of reading - for me, anyway. A bit more editing could take your work from being good to being perfect.

Batman

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Grammar buddy, grammar!

Margaret Alice

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I think this story has great potential. I was left wanting to know more about Scythe and the escaped prisoner! Even though I thought the story ended abruptly, I was intrigued by the world and characters you created. Could you check out my story, "The Fate Continuum?" Good luck!

Cutie

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Great story with a lovely balance. The details aren't too long to dull the reader nor shor and misguiding. I really liked the characters, how common they're but unique in the story. The open ending is great, makes me wanna read more. Overall, I loved it.

Rose Burke

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I want to wake up tomorrow and be this character you've created, Scythe. She's mysterious in an interesting way that makes the reader want to know everything about her. I love this concept, and I look forward to reading more! If you get a chance check out my story This Girl and a Bartender and let me know what you think, thanks!

Tiff S

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Amazing! Left me wanting more. I don't read books to often but i would surely take the time to sit and read this book keep up the good work

DonH

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you sir, are a gentleman and a scholar

Anis S.

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I love the way the things are described, it makes everything so vivid. The character is intriguing, i'd love to see how she develops throughout the story.

John Benjamin

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Was so good. The way he portrayed everything just left me begging for more. I must find out the end to this book! Please finish it.

Brennan Mihalick

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They say "Always leave them wanting more.". Well, I want more. This was an excellent start, and I would purchase the full version if it were available to see where the story goes. The details and imagery used easily made the story come alive inside my mind as I read, which I feel is one of this story's greatest qualities.

Lisa Rose

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I loved the character of Scythe. I wouldn't want to meet her in a dark alley. Would like to read more to find out what is bugging Scythe about the setup. If you have the time please read my story 'Drift Away' and leave a review to let me know if you liked it.

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