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Liz Pardue-Schultz

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Story: The Girl

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MWFowler

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The imagery in this piece is enjoyable. Although the story's use of symbolism can be viewed by some readers as blatant, I think it fits the narrative and voice. We have a first-person narrator who is still a teenager, and so any use of symbolism would be more "told." Besides, sometimes, it's just nicely done, as is the case here. The breaks in scenes are well-executed, and the dialogue is first-class. The resolution of the story more than works for me. Although the story may seem as if it has been told before, what makes it fresh is its flow, dialogue, and imagery, something lacking from many stories of a similar structure and subject matter. Best of luck to the author.

ToddMtn

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Ramon took the words right out of my mouth, so I won't repeat much. I didn't like the main protagonist who seemed self-absorbed and not even a respectable villain to me, that is until the end when I saw some compassion in her as the hateful, villainous cloak was lifted; I breathed a sigh of relief. It is prose-perfect and I find myself admiring that. I'm not ordinarilly a second timer, read-wise but I think I'll make an exception here. OK, on second read, I see what gsreader is talking about concerning nuances. It is quite well done.

Ramon

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I have to admit that if I hadn't read the other reviews prior to reading the story, I'm not sure if I would have gotten it at all. The author definitely demonstrates an ability to weave a tale and create technically perfect prose. Perhaps, this might have made more sense to me if I were a woman. From my own perspective, I felt that the meat (memorable) parts of the story started about 60% of the way through it. In the first half, I almost quit reading it several times. Perhaps, a little drawn out? I also had trouble suspending my disbelief with the family's reaction to the girl in the tree. But this is where it becomes a little hairy... because according to the other reviews... the girl in the tree is the same girl. I didn't get that feeling at all until about 3/4 of the way through. Then, I did have that thought for as moment, especially when she unveiled the marks of abuse. But the ending left me confused. I think is a good story. From my perspective it could use a little tightening.

gsreader

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This is a well-written story that pulls you in quickly and delivers at the end. It's definitely worth a second read to fully appreciate the nuances of the allegory. Well done!

dariap

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That was great LIz. Can't wait to read more!

LindaM1982

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Loved this story! It's haunting, and I was hooked from the start!

HardSell

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LOL @ the "Book Lover" who gave this a poor rating because he couldn't understand it! (It's called symbolism, dude. Didn't you take 10th grade english?) To resond to Prize Daul, what MAKES this piece a literary work instead of just a YA story is the heavy use of symbolism/metaphor to construct the parable. Although the intent was blatant, the writing was concise and gripping, leaving the audience gaping in horror at the end... before standing to applaud. BRAVA!

Book lover

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Ummm....I feel like the only person here who is a little confused by that ending. So the girl she hated was herself? Her alter ego so to say? Well written story but I obviously didn't understand the ending at all...

skim

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Great read. Liz's writing is consistently intriguing, honest and gripping.

bionic lady J

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Wow! Yes, more please!

Kelly K

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Haunting and cuts very close to home.

Prize Daul

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Just like the others said, this is a haunting parable about the inevitable adolescent encounter with her other self, and the terrifying ways she faces rejection of her identity. While it could easily be a piece suited for a YA audience, those who have already experienced and healed from these formative years will gain the most from this piece, thus making it a powerful piece of literature.

Becky

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This parable of self loathing evokes feelings I would guess most American girls feel at one time or another, and the story illustrates them in entrancing style. I would love to read more from this author.

AllisonF

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Evocative. Haunting. Captivating. This well-crafted piece grabbed my attention from the very start and kept it until the end. Liz Pardue-Schultz's work is consistently breathtaking and this is no exception. I can't wait to read her next piece ... expectantly, penned as America's Next Author.

HayleeAus

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A haunting piece, for me it called to mind the enrapturing style of Jeffrey Eugenides' The Virgin Suicides - only with a suspicious female narrative rather than an adoring male one. The piece blooms and turns and grows like her trusty dagwood tree, the one constant in a familiar world of teenage torment. I await her next piece with baited breath. Brava, Liz.

OnIt

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This was great - I really wanted to see how this story went, right from the start. I was not disappointed. Loved it!

Rowena

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Very cool, surreal piece. I was grabbed from the start and the ending really fits for what I think she was trying to accomplish. Great job!

LeslieSC

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Liz's writing is a pleasure to read--her well-crafted story will leave you wanting more.

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