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Rose Burke

Twenty-six year old avid reader, writer, artist… always seeking new adventures and inspiration…can never decide when a piece is complete…usually writes erotica...overuses the word ‘cock’. www.roseburke.com

Story: This Girl And A Bartender

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What is the best writing advice you've ever heard?
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'Write what you know, and always be yourself.'
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When you start a new story do you prepare an outline in advance or do you just jump right in?
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I usually jump right in, giving each piece the room to develop on its own.
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How do you deal with writing criticism, apart from just ignoring it?
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I always welcome constructive criticism, & even the advice or opinion of fellow writers. I've developed a writing style that I truly enjoy working in, & while I love sharing my work, in the end I write for myself. It keeps me sane...ish.
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America's Next Author has been running for almost 8 weeks. If you could re-submit now, would you change anything about your story?
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Probably...I constantly edit the stories/poems I've written. I'm never completely satisfied.

Reviews

Kemp Sabourin

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I enjoyed it very much Rose, sorry it took me so long to get back. I think we can all relate to the characters here and the emotions they feel when the surroundings are not to their likings. Very nice and you have a great engaging style to your writing. Keep at it!

Peter Lahanas

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I really enjoyed this; I loved the underlying cynicism of the character’s frustration at the singles scene. It’s a realistic snapshot and it’s a cycle we’ve all been through, hence very relatable. The style of writing had me completely hooked. The coarse language used is perfectly appropriate for the character and brings to life the internal anger/cynicism/ disappointment, she feels. The story wouldn’t have been as convincing without it. Nice work.

Busyfingers

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"That was just the kind of girl she was" would probably work as an alternative title! I'm thinking even though this girl's bubble had long burst with 'that girl', she still makes out time for her. Probably has some kind of thing for her. How else can it be explained? Good writing. One can sense the unhappiness underneath, and the dissatisfaction with the endless cycle of meaninglessness.

Andre`

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Good read, down to earth, very engaging. A bit of an anti- climax though, i thought something would have happened to "that girl"-- some poet justice!

BlondeD

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Stories like this once were called, soft-porn. This one is merely a 21st centry version of the 20-something angst of the 1970's,-80s, and -90s. The overused cursing indicates laziness or the writer's limited vocabulary. Disappointing, as compared to several other contest pieces.

Travis Smith

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I really enjoyed the the flow and pacing of this story. It had a very raw and plotless feel which is makes it very realistic. The only criticism I have is some of the swearing. I can tell you're a better writer than that, and I think some of the word usage is over-done. Swearing is sort of a an anger emotion which is a mask, underneath it is pain. I want to know this girls inner-pain and struggle a little deeper. Other than that great piece, keep writing!

Lori Paris

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I was a little surprised with the swearing in this story. Not that I don't enjoy a hard cock....just that I was under the impression that this was not the kind of language America's Next Author wanted. However, it is refreshing to know that they are open to some and whatnot. I enjoyed the imagery you used, for example, when she was talking about throwing herself against the prison walls in her mind. If you extend this imagery to your character people will connect with them better. I understand your use of the ....but that's just the kind of girl she was though....repeatedly in the story, but I think you missed one golden opportunity to drive it home....the title....How about....That's Just the Kind of Girl She Was. That would make me want to read it more for sure. I like the vulgarity and I can identify with this style of writing so I embraced it. It may, however, turn some people off if over done. I think you could develop this character easily in a book. You definitely have talent but you just need to tighten it up a bit. Good Job!!!

Boris2

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Great story! Reads like a breeze and enjoyed the internal monologue. Gritty when it needs to be gritty, but makes you feel for the main character. Talented!

William J. Hammon

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I absolutely loved the utter contempt the girl internally showed towards her "friend." The repeated lines, the constantly evolving ways to mentally insult her, the cursing - first rate indeed. I also liked the eventual resolution of the crush, though I found it a bit abrupt. Maybe it's an allusion to premature orgasm, in which case it's brilliant, but otherwise, it slightly (only slightly) mars an otherwise wonderfully sardonic tale of the types of nights gone wrong we all experience as so-called "swinging singles."

Victoria Riley

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I liked the writing and the eventual disappointment that the main character found with her friend and her crush the bartender. Neither was all that she expected. This short story was not long and drawn out and it kept my attention. However, I didn't find it necessary to use the "F" word so many times, for me that word make the story lose credibility, sadly. Over all, good writing. Please take a moment to read my story "The Moccasins"

Jill Amber Menard

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I really enjoyed this story. It had a good pace and moved along nicely. I like the fact that the character is so miserable "going out" and seems to really despise her "friend" yet it is obvious that it is all better than being at home alone. It makes you wonder about her life at home...does she hate her job? Have no aspirations? No roommates? In a way you sum up the fact that she doesn't seem to have a lot going on in her life without actually going into detail about her life outside of the bar. I also like the way she is portrayed as being the "aggressor" in the bathroom make-out scene. I definitely felt her disappointment when the bartender turned out to be a wimp. Well done!!!

Wendy S

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I liked this story! it was a look into someone else's life and realizing not all is roses and sunshine for singles. A very interesting story that I would have liked to read more of just to see how she made out the next week. Thank you for writing this!

M.J. Milner

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Nice characterizations of modern people engaged in sloppy entanglement. Authentic use of frank dialog might benefit from introduction of a character who has oppositional intent. Nice story though could develop an arc with the insertion of the dominant will into the defended soft vulnerability of bravado. ;-)

Summer Beth

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I really enjoyed reading this story. I think we all have that one egotistical "friend" whom we can't stand. I could feel the 'I don't give an eff' attitude by the character which I loved. I also liked the repetition of the line "That's just the kind of girl she was". Great job!

baggyk

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I found this place to be a completely realistic portrait of how selfish and ego-driven young adults can be. I love stories about bars, going out dancing and night clubs. It's reassuing, when you have to end that life to stay home with your children, to remember that those days were never actually much fun. Good luck with the contest. Please take a look at my story, Finnegan and Grandfather Cheng, if you get a moment.

Pen Of The Golden Child

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You give a great description of what it's like to be in the mind of female in an unwanted situation. You took me out of my mind and into this woman's which is very hard to do. And you know what, I liked the vulgar language, and I'd probably like the female character in this story too. I actually know somebody like the friend, it was all just so relateable. Great job. Very original. Keep up the good work.

Ramon

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I liked it! It was raw and real. The emotions were strong and compelling. I loved how you never said the other girl's name. And I particularly liked how you kept the descriptions of everyone to a bare minimum. Nothing turns me off faster in a story than hearing that someone had golden locks of hair that cascaded over their shoulders like a waterfall on a beautiful Spring morning. You get what I mean. Very nice Rose!

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