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I really want to be able to make a living as a writer. I like telling stories and I've done pretty well in competitons I've entered in the past.

Story: Cursed?

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ucat42

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I enjoyed the way the story flowed and your commentary controlled it. Well paced, well timed. I wrote a little horror story too, if you want to have a read & review. Either way, well done!

Alex Wyper

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An excellent read. It drew me in as it unfolded.

Ewan Guild

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Nice stuff, but I think it would have been better if the narrative was in present tense. I like how it's presented as a dialogue, but I'm not entirely sure it's entirely necessary. To make it more interesting, I would diversify the sentence structure somewhat - at the start, there are too many short-short sentences consisting of a single clause. Some commas in there would break it up a little and, come to think of it, build some suspense. There were some grammatical errors here and there (full stops missed, commas absent, etc) that could have been solved with a good thorough proof-read. Now for the good stuff: I enjoyed the general idea. Deliciously dark, you seem to enjoy corrupting your characters. I can relate to that. the sort of slow realisation you get as you read through the piece is nice, but could be advanced if you held back describing the room until later. Generally though it's a good piece, and I'm nitpicking because it's a competition entry. A good piece of work - but haven't you had around a year to revise it?

Alison Taylor

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This had me gripped.

Lucy McCall

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Really enjoyed reading this story. Liked the way the suspense built throughout reading it. The death scenes were good :)

Lisa Rose

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I liked your story, but I wish that you had written dialogue instead of telling us the story. The two characters don't actually talk to each other. You really wouldn't need to use the parentheses then, they were distracting to me. Again this is only my opinion and I did actually like the story. If you have the time please read my story 'Drift Away' and leave a review to let me know if you liked it.

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