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My name is Stephanie. I'm from New York. I'm 21 years old. I have too much anxiety to write much more about myself >_<

Story: Control

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Anne (Valerie)

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Written from a rich kid's POV. She is not free. She is going to be charged with murder. Oh, wait. Rebecca is rich and white, she might get sent to Promises Rehab in Malibu. No jail time for the rich. She might even get her own reality show on MTV. Maybe I'm too old, but this story is too. I believe Napoleon had much more pressing issues, than Meth Girl, whose eyes turned from green to blue.

Lisa Rose

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Don't let anybody stop you from writing if that is what you want to do. I've gotten some bad reviews too. Everybody has their opinion. Read it and then pick out the things you can use and forget about the rest. I thought it was a good story, well written. And as Frederick said there is always that Stephanie Meyer... millions of books sold (I am a fan of both of you). If you have the time, please read my story, 'Drift Away' and let me know if you liked it. Check out my reviews some of them are... interesting.

Ramon

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This was a well written piece. In terms of plot, it was fairly straightforward and predictable. I thought the drug scene in the kitchen and the immediately following scene where the MC is by herself and then falls asleep on the floor particularly good. Most of the prose prior to that felt like it was being told rather than shown. Some folks would argue that her shooting the boyfriend was a twist. I didn't really see it that way. The minute I knew she was going to get the gun, I knew she was going to shoot him. And finally, a meth addict doesn't walk away and start over just because one dealer is dead. I liked the story overall but feel it deserves an average rating.

jacqueod

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Great, great read - Stephanie is extremely talented. Can't wait to read more!!

Book lover

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Your one star is completely undeserved. Good story, interesting story line, well written, well edited...what more can you want? I really enjoyed reading this piece and I thought it was well done.

Sue63

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I LIKED this a lot. It kept me reading till the end to find out what happened to her. I would love to read a part two that delved a little further into her life and see if she was able to beat the demons, did she go to jail, etc. While Frederick might think it was cliche, as parts were, they were also very intriguing which is really what this contest is all about. We are not looking to read literature here. Some of the stories on here I couldnt get through to the end, didnt hold my attention, this one did. It was a good read.

Shannon

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Personally i think this a great story. I felt the need to keep reading the story till the very end in order to find out what the demon was and how she was going to escape her addiction. I didn't think it was a cliche high school story because honestly things like this don't normally happen in high school. I was not expecting the plot twist of Rebecca killing her boyfriend. That is certainly not something i have read before in other stories and it was quite a shocking ending to me. This story has the potential to be a great novel if the author decided to turn it into one. Given that this is a short story contest i think the writer did a great job at keeping the story suspenseful and captivating. Had she have more space she could have developed all the symptoms of a meth addict with ease and had more of a character connection between brain and rebecca. She shows strong skills with the details she included and the structure she choose. This story was beautifully written and a great read. If this was ever developed into a novel it would be a sure buy for me.

Erika H.

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In response to Frederick...I'm not sure what your high school life is like, but if it was one rich with meth addicts and murderous cheerleaders, I have to wonder if you went to school in a Lifetime movie. Yes, the plot moves quickly and cleans itself up a bit suddenly, but this is a 'short story' after all. If the author had more time/space to flesh out the narrative, I'm sure it would feature more developed characterization as well as more details into the addiction part of the story line. I believe the contest is focusing on the TALENT that the authors bring in a relatively short piece of writing, and therefore the proof needed to make them a potentially published author. Your comment about 'what kids want' in stories is extremely pretentious - are you speaking for all of the youth in America and their respective literary choices? For every fan out 'Twilight' I can easily name a dozen who think that it's garbage and a desperate love story. This particular piece may not be of an interesting subject matter to you - I have to admit, meth addicted blonde girls aren't highly ranked on my own interest scale - but the writing, structure and suspense developed in this story make it a winner in it's own right. Insulting someone's intelligence based on 1500 words isn't constructive criticism, it's bullying. If you kept your review to your opinion regarding the written work itself, I wouldn't have even bothered to make an account to respond to you. But since you decided to respond in a way that was pompous and degrading, I thought something should be said.

Frederick Maitland

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I can't quite figure out whether or not the author of this piece is particularly intelligent or simply stuck in high school. While being readable and in good shape grammatically, it's some of the most cliched writing I've come across for this contest, and I've read a few. The reason I wonder whether or not this is a smarter piece than I might give it credit for is because it's the type of writing that Stephenie Meyer managed to make so much money off of. The main character is the textbook definition of a Mary-Sue which, for those unfamiliar, is basically a protagonist who is lacking in any real flaws. Our Rebecca is a gorgeous, rich, blonde girl who is admired by her entire school, but she harbors a deep dark secret; she's addicted to Meth. But, in following with her typical Mary Sue, it's not her fault, her boyfriend forced it on her the way he tries to force himself on her physically, she was just trying to make him happy, it's not her fault and she doesn't even actually want to do it! Yet we find her bumping lines of Meth off her parent's kitchen counter who are, of course, away in Aspen as all rich parents in every cliched, edgy, high school story are. Throughout the story, she avoids the traditional trappings of an addict (which is not something users of Meth oft do) and magically breaks her habit...by murdering her boyfriend. This story is rife with trite, pedestrian writing that lacks any nuance and a protagonist that is incredibly unbelievable and spectacularly far from relatable. The sad part is, this seems to be what kids want in their stories today.

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