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Polite, thoughtful, and relentless are the three things that compass my actions. I like to write on society/ politics/economics. Life hasn't been easy, but trial and tribulation yields character.

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What is the best writing advice you've ever heard?
"Throughout your writing and editing, think about the story from the readers perspective."
When you start a new story do you prepare an outline in advance or do you just jump right in?
I spend many days thinking about the content/ characters. I outline the plot in my head. When I am ready to write I dive in. For a book however, I outline chapters/ themes ahead of time. I have also been known to do character maps in larger stories.



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Thought-provoking - illuminates how the American Dream ideology can be an ironic contradiction to and eradication of real values: becoming a contorted, euphemistic justification for greed and personal interest, catering to those in power over those in genuine need. I like how directly the two different interpretations of the ideology were put forth by juxtaposing the two characters Briggs and Peer. Someone else posted that the story was hard to understand because of the switch in narration... not so sure that's the issue: writers are traditionally advised to commit to either 1st or 3rd person, but in this case, the chapter breaks indicate where it's going to transition into another character's perspective and it seems that switching perspective and POV served as a strategy to build up the characters here. Although, I do think it gets unclear at times who is speaking when there's dialogue: Not all of the quotes are set apart by speaker and tend to bleed into another character's speaking parts, and/or the quote doesn't have a clearly defined speaker (sometimes just 'he' when several different men are speaking to each other). Usually having to infer who is speaking is not a problem if it's been the same character for a while or the same two characters back and forth. And it could be for many different reasons, but the beginning of the story is definitely more of an effort to get through (my guess is all the subordinate complex sentences you were piling on.. : dependent clauses hanging onto other dependent clauses, and not getting to the main clause/point/action until the end of the sentence). I'm only saying this because I was trying to pinpoint why I had to re-read so often in the beginning, and apparently those types of sentences are a part of your writing style. They're just not the most fluid to read. However, the ending scenes made it worth it. You really convey a strong sense of scenery throughout and some resonant imagery. I really liked "Within minutes the imprisoning net took form behind the boat, the brim of the ocean water bubbling with the sight and sound of writhing fish." The idea of the net "taking form" seemed somehow novel and intuitive at the same time. The ability to so fittingly re-envision an ordinary experience like that is a real gift in writing.

Lisa Rose

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I enjoyed reading your story. It shows what happens when society breaks down and men revert to their baser instincts, survival of the fittest; every man for himself. It asks the question how far would you go to ensure the survival of yourself or your family? How many of your principles would you sacrifice to stay alive? I hope I never have to answer those questions. If you have the time please read my story 'Drift Away' and leave a review to let me know if you liked it.


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Hm, I wish you were more specific Boru. The story has a multiple narrative in order to produce a visceral and omniscient description. The chapters are simply there for each scene to stand alone and to allow the reader to connect them. It creates a level of ambiguity in time frame and sequence, but I never thought the plot would be unclear to any one. The only "out of sequence" part is that chapter II and VIII are the same scene. The story essentially attempts to illustrate that ideology is warped for self interest.


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I don't get it. Sorry, I didn't understand a word of this story. I didn't understand the structure. I didn't understand how all the sections were connected. I didn't understand why the narration changed from third to first person. I feel like I have been told a joke and I just did not understand the punchline.


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Once you got going it was a little more enjoyable of a read very nice

Wendy S

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A very interesting story indeed! I like the different take on a possible future for America. Disturbing but intriguing. I like how your characters have a depth to them that helps bring the story to life. I look forward to reading more stories from you! Thank you! If you could spare a moment or two would you please read my story "Hiding in Plain Sight" and leave a review? Thank you~

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