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Story: The Fatal Mistake


Lisa Rose

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I liked it. Interesting story, it kept my attention throughout, although you do use a lot of short sentences. For example (I felt defeated. They were going to find me. The Nerenos searched the room.) Try combining several of the short sentences into one. (As the Nerenos searched the room, I felt defeated; I knew they were going to find me crouching in the closet.) Of course this is only my opinion, I'm not an expert. If you have the time, would write a review on my story Drift Away and let me know what you think. Thanks.

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